Concise: In my opinion, that’s a problem.
Some sentence structures tend to be wordier than others. Although the passive voice isn’t incorrect and is completely fine to use in moderation, it’s often a weaker type of sentence construction. If you find yourself trending towards using the passive voice because you think it sounds a bit fancier or softens something unpleasant, remember that active voice sets a stronger and more direct tone. Keep most of your sentences in active voice—you’ll find that they also tend to be more concise.
“I witnessed an eclipse this morning.”
Good: Economists considered Shravers Publishing to be a model of modern employee conditions. Dr. John Mitchems established this company as a subsidiary of the Shravers Education Group in 1923.
Consider the following examples.
In this statement, you don’t need “joint.” You don’t even need “together.” Saying that X and Y worked on a project says it all. “Joint” and “together” are redundant.
Watch out for “of,” “to,” “on,” and other prepositions. They often mark phases you can reduce to one or two words.
- Example: The 1780 constitution of Massachusetts was written by John Adams.
If you are a student, pay close attention to your instructors’ comments on your essays. Have they written things like “wordy,” “passive voice,” “filler” or “irrelevant”? By learning to write concisely, you will be able to fill your papers with more substantive information. Getting to the point promptly can help you become a clearer thinker and a more engaging writer.